You offer me the the entire world
i say nothing
you respond to my silence
with a scream
angrily anticipating unsaid scorn
we argue, i scream
i’m sick and tired
sick and tired of you
you go to the vanity by the window
away from me
you brush your hair
pretending not to see me
then the explosion
a car crash
an atomic bomb
with fear i turn away
and it washes over me
over my back
blindness saves me
it’s over and i look again
and you are gone –
out by the window
a spirit flits by
but returns
to pause but for an instant
and look directly at me
as my heart stops
as tears well up in my eyes
i want to ask
where have you gone?
– matt at shadow of iris
You know what would make this stronger? If you used ‘caps’ for ‘i’ In MHO. I like the write anyways though.
To tell the truth, it often bothers me when people don’t use caps for ‘I’. Yet when I wrote this poem, and some others, I just can’t let myself put the capitalized ‘i’ in there. I don’t really know why, so this is just a guess, but maybe I like beginning with a capital and ending with a period — as if the entire poem is a single thought.
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